What I learnet...

Learnings about Topic:

American artifact, was one of the new meaningful words that I learnt before starting the first essay.  I found an artifact can be an object which is descriptive of the culture of the people who are living with it.  I learnt how to look at "Barbie doll" now.  When I was kid I had few Barbie dolls, they were my kids, and I loved them because they were beautiful.  Twenty years later, just before this essay, I found the real beauty of the Barbie. It is not the physical beauty but the beauty of the nature of the culture which can flow from individuals thoughts to their hand made objects.  Still I disagree with some points of view of the writers of the journal about how Barbie doll is a bad American artifact, but at least I found why am I attracted by some American artifacts and how can I avoid to be influenced by these artifacts. 

Analyzing the essay:

I am analyzing my essay like an EXPERT!!! :))

Oops, Where is the "Title" of the essay!!!

• Introduction: looks a little bit lost at the end. I started with story of how I first found an object that could be an American artifact which is NIKE brand, but did not well explained how this artifact reflects the American culture. I just talked about my own personal challenges with this brand.
• Thesis statement: not very clear. probably here it is:" I think the craving of this brand for American people is just because they think it is more fashion, better called “fashion and sportive”." but it lacks some good ideas, I really did not have the good points for analyzing the NIKE brand. of course it is about fashion but I should have said how NIKE became such a cultural artifact, why people have chosen this brand?  
• Body Paragraphs: The story each line is about the new topic but not proving the "American artifact". Some description of meanings of the NIKE but really how this NIKE shoes is a reflection of the American culture. for example Barbie doll has arch shape feet that only heels fit in them. this pictures reflects how American culture wants women to look.  What about NIKE? What is it carrying with its name? 
• Conclusion: not bad. I could talk about the result of the artifact on human life or at least through the American culture. What would happen if every body wear NIKE shoes? for example in the essay from the book "Common Culture" we read how the Barbie Doll and its accessories can have an influence on children and their beliefs about the American girl and how they want to show up in the society in future and how they chose their carries based on cultural beliefs. What about Nike?
• Grammar and punctuations: there are some problems, If I improve my grammar then my sentences might sound less vague. Also I missed some appropriate punctuations, mostly Commas (,).